As expected, our first video draft got a Level 1, however we
were expecting a low level because the song wasn’t fully filmed and we had
limited locations and an abysmal mise en scene to work with. However we have
some significant feedback to take into consideration when filming/editing our
final video.
To begin with we were told to ‘lose the smoking shots’
because they ‘add nothing’ to the draft. At first they were simply used to fill
up some space and add emphasis on a boy being lonely (lyrics and visual
connections) however this evidently doesn’t have the effect we thought it would
and therefore we will most likely delete these shots and find more creative
ideas in order to add this effect. Secondly, we were advised to take off the
covers on the drum set we used. This was something we wanted to do originally
however the house we where filming at was our peers dads band practice room,
because of this he didn’t want the covers touching (he is very protective over
his drum kit) and therefore we couldn’t do this, which clearly had a
detrimental affect on the video. We also had some negative feedback on our mise
en scene used for the draft. Like previously mentioned it was our friends dads
band practice room. He plays rock music and therefore has a few rock posters
nailed into the wall, which unfortunately couldn’t be removed for the purpose
of our draft. Luckily we managed to cover up a Simpsons ‘spider pig’ poster, this would have caused
the mise en scene even worse. Furthermore during a couple of shots we had the
door of the room and a room heater involved in the scene. This unfortunately added
an unprofessional look for the draft, which we couldn’t prevent in any way
given the size of the room and the vast mirror positioned in the centre. For
are main location we are considering using an empty room was white walls which
is more spacious and will allow creativity while maintaining simplicity.
On the other hand we did surprising receive a positive
comment on our guitar shots. Because Greg can actually play the guitar and we
mainly used close up shots no real mise en scene was involved which allowed
focus on just the playing of the instrument, which actually looked realistic
and professional. Furthermore the equipment we had was high standard equipment,
for example we used Marshall amps and fender guitars. Along with this the
clothing items our band wore suited our genre effectively and this gave us some
clarity to be proud of and take into our final cover.
To conclude we both understand that the whole video definitely
needs to be re filmed in a new set location. And also a lot more time needs to
be put into editing and filming to complete a high standard video to our full
potential.
