Draft Video: Teacher Feedback

As expected, our first video draft got a Level 1, however we were expecting a low level because the song wasn’t fully filmed and we had limited locations and an abysmal mise en scene to work with. However we have some significant feedback to take into consideration when filming/editing our final video.

To begin with we were told to ‘lose the smoking shots’ because they ‘add nothing’ to the draft. At first they were simply used to fill up some space and add emphasis on a boy being lonely (lyrics and visual connections) however this evidently doesn’t have the effect we thought it would and therefore we will most likely delete these shots and find more creative ideas in order to add this effect. Secondly, we were advised to take off the covers on the drum set we used. This was something we wanted to do originally however the house we where filming at was our peers dads band practice room, because of this he didn’t want the covers touching (he is very protective over his drum kit) and therefore we couldn’t do this, which clearly had a detrimental affect on the video. We also had some negative feedback on our mise en scene used for the draft. Like previously mentioned it was our friends dads band practice room. He plays rock music and therefore has a few rock posters nailed into the wall, which unfortunately couldn’t be removed for the purpose of our draft. Luckily we managed to cover up a Simpsons  ‘spider pig’ poster, this would have caused the mise en scene even worse. Furthermore during a couple of shots we had the door of the room and a room heater involved in the scene. This unfortunately added an unprofessional look for the draft, which we couldn’t prevent in any way given the size of the room and the vast mirror positioned in the centre. For are main location we are considering using an empty room was white walls which is more spacious and will allow creativity while maintaining simplicity.

On the other hand we did surprising receive a positive comment on our guitar shots. Because Greg can actually play the guitar and we mainly used close up shots no real mise en scene was involved which allowed focus on just the playing of the instrument, which actually looked realistic and professional. Furthermore the equipment we had was high standard equipment, for example we used Marshall amps and fender guitars. Along with this the clothing items our band wore suited our genre effectively and this gave us some clarity to be proud of and take into our final cover.

To conclude we both understand that the whole video definitely needs to be re filmed in a new set location. And also a lot more time needs to be put into editing and filming to complete a high standard video to our full potential.